my camping day

Everyone was in a line about to go on the bus to the school camp. I got there just in time and we got going. When we got there we set up camp before night. At 2am I woke up needing to pee and i saw a zombie dingo. I ran thru the tents but i saw no-one I looked up and saw a big cliff with a tree leaning from it. I went up the cliff and climbed the tree. the dingo’s didn’t follow because the sun went down so i went home and never spoke of it again.

1 thought on “my camping day

  1. What a scary experience! It reminded me strongly of going camping at the river and having to get up in the middle of the night to go to the toilet… it is always so spooky to hear animal noises in the dark… you did a great job of creating a believable setting, well done!

    My wish is about vocabulary. What other words could you have used rather than “saw” and “big”? For example, the sentence could become, “I noticed an immense cliff with a tree leaning away from it.”

    Keep up the great work!

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